The Worst Day Ever!!!! Katie

Today was going to be a great day because it was summer and we were going to the mall to buy new shoes and clothes.  When we got there, there was a sign that said, “closed for renovations.” I was so cross because shopping is my favorite thing to do!  We tried different doors, but they were all closed.  I was so angry and had no choice but to turn around and leave.   It was like the whole day was suddenly turning against me. Then I looked up at the blue sky and said, “well at least it’s still summer!”

5 thoughts on “The Worst Day Ever!!!! Katie

  1. Kia ora Katie. I like your positivity at the end of your story – that’s so neat to be able to see some good in a bad situation! You have done a very good job of setting the scene and creating atmosphere by describing your feelings. Well done, and keep up the excellent writing Katie!

  2. Dear Katie,
    I liked how you added lots of details. One thing I think you can improve on is adding cooler words. That’s happen to to me before and I was very mad. Did you know I also read about this happening to someone! I look forward to you writing back to me and congrats on getting on special showcase!

    From,
    Amalia in Illinois

  3. i liked how you added a lot of emotion when you realized it was closed. one thing you could do better is add a little more emotion to your piece. if this is a true story well it happens to my sister a couple of times

    Sincerely
    Anderson

  4. Hi, I love this story! I love shopping too. One thing I like about your story is How much detail you put in it made me feel like I was there. One thing you could do is add if you were happy about it being summer. All in all I love this piece!
    From,
    Celine
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