The best day here/ Alina

It was my third day in San Francisco. So far its been horrible its been cold, rainy, and I’ve been doing nothing fun. So my mom decided to takes me to a wax museum. I was hesitant at first but its better than doing nothing. So I went to the museum and there were wax elephants and wax lions. It was a really cool place but my favorite part was the British loading a canyon. It was there best wax figure in the museum. It was so good they put the history of what they were doing. It was interesting.

3 thoughts on “The best day here/ Alina

  1. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Alina. I made a personal connection to your text of visiting museums with wax figures. I have seen some great figures, but I have also seen some that were really bad (some were unrecognisable as the famous figure they were supposed to be)! Remember to re-read your writing to edit for meaning, and punctuation. A typo can alter the meaning for your reader, or change the tense. Overuse of one word (like ‘so’ ) can make your text less interesting for your reader. I enjoyed reading your text this week. 🙏

  2. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Alina. I made a personal connection to your text because I have visited museums with wax figures- some better than others. Remember to re- read and edit your writing. Using a variety of sentence beginnings makes your writing interesting for your reader. Try not to overuse one word eg ‘so’. I can see the effort you put into carefully choosing vocabulary. 😊

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