Ashlynn 100 W/C

“Hi Toby! Happy birthday!”

“Aww thanks Niki! I’m really glad you and Wilbur could come!”

“Is that your pool? It looks nice!”

“Yeah, Tommy got here early so he helped me set up!”

Toby, Wilbur, and Niki headed over to the snack table.

“THIS IS SO GOOD!!”

“Thanks! I made it myself!”

“Dang it! I forgot your present on my bike! Wilbur, can you go get it please?”

“Yeah sure…”

“Thanks!”

“NIKI! ITS NOT HERE!”

“IT WAS THERE A SECOND AGO! WHERE DID IT GO???”

“Its fine Niki! You can give it to me later.”

“Are you sure?”

“Yep!”

2 thoughts on “Ashlynn 100 W/C

  1. Hi Ashlynn,

    First of all, let me say how lovely your name is. I almost named my daughter Ashlynn because my middle name is Lynn. Next, I thoroughly enjoyed your story in dialogue. The conversation seems truly authentic, like a pair of friends having an everyday conversation. Way to go! Another student that I visited today also had dialogue, although hers was focused on spells and wizardry. She’d assigned each speaker a different color, and that was pretty neat, too. It’s not something you’d necessarily do on paper or in a published book, but it’s a colorful idea for a blog post. 🙂 You know, now that I think about it, the book Legend has color-coded, alternating chapters. One character is blue type; another character is pinkish red type. Back to your story…I like it! I was entertained, transported elsewhere momentarily, and I got to overhear a realistic conversation. Keep on writing, Ashlynn! 🙂

    Cheers,
    Mrs. Rombach, Team 100WC
    8th Grade English & Communications Teacher from VA, USA
    https://blogs.lcps.org/rombachravenrockstars/

    • Thank you for reviewing my story! If you did name your daughter Ashlynn, that would be so cool because I have never met an Ashlynn with 2 n’s. 🙂

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